The DeMOn LoVeR

I thought it was well written but i didn't like it as a story. It wasn't exciting enough. Too ambiguos.

This story contains a lot of flashbacks and premonitions or red herrings.
In the beginning it tries to set a mysterious unknown ambience when describing the setting. The setting is full of memories of better days and is nostalgic. The house is unkept, giving us a dustier, older and scarier house than it would be in daylight and clean.

It never tells us what will happen. The only clue we have to something unknown is a mysterious letter that appears. It is new, untouched by dust and it speaks of long lost memories. These memories are awoken in a flashback where we are taken to a time when the narrator was younger and somewhat in love. Here her “soldier” reminds her what they have just accorded and tells her to not forget to do it. We still don’t know what they are talking about but with the title, and the description of his face we know something is wrong and unnatural.

The ambience becomes more and more tense as time passes and finally desperate the narrator leaves the house. Even though everything is calm, the nagging doubt tells us the end. The nagging doubt which is proven.